Hearts and Kidneys.

Kia ora.

This week we had Mrs. B bring in some organs for us to observe.
She brought real animal hearts and kidneys.This relates to our recent visit to Life Ed.It was very interesting and I must say it did smell nice when they were cooking.Here is some writing inspired by yesterdays experience.

Here is a photo of my group.

Here is my writing.

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Descriptive Writing

Kia Ora.

This week at school we had some scientists observe our class.

They looked at how well we worked on our computers and how our teachers work with us.  We did some descriptive writing using our 5 senses, we chose a picture to write about.  We were expected to write a short story about it using our 5 senses but we had to do at least 3.

Here is my story called the burnt hospital :

Ashes crumble silently from the burnt crust walls of the hospital.

Faint noises of mice echoed through the walls.

You can feel the rusted bars of the old beds.

The walls smell musty and damp.

Hanging torn curtains covered in ashes dance in the wind, making ashes fly like fairies.

The smashed glass windows shattered into tiny bits of glass ready to slice your feet open.

   

Rose

We are learning how to get better marks in our writing bu using hooks, similes and metaphors.I decided to write about my gorgeous sister, Rose Rangimarie Ratahi.


                                                               Rose. 
“Hi, baby Rose,” I say as my sister and father walked through the doorway.Her smiles are wide oceans.Her chubby cheeks smushed up like a flat ball, her eyes all squinted up.Cuddling her felt like hugging a teddy bear.She started to smell a bit for a moment.She is my cuddly bear, sweet, adorable, and always happy.It seems to be that she is always happy to see me.

 Have you ever heard a noise so loud it makes you shiver? When she cries it sounds like a devil's scream, her tears drown me. She screeches like crazy!!!Although my hearing is good she makes me feel as if I’m deaf.She’s either hungry or just wants something.But she’s always cute to me and I love how she drops her bottom lip and makes cute facials. 

 She cuddles Mum. Drinks her milk. She has no teeth but ate a whole shortbread!! She is a food vacuum cleaner.When she drifts off to sleep she’s just so cute.She could fool anyone with her smiles. 
 By Tylah Ratahi

My Narrative.

We have been learning how to write narratives. Narratives are a style of writing which tell a story usually following this structure: Introduce a time,place and good character/s. Then introduce bad character/s and a problem. Have the good character solve the problem.End up with a solution to the problem which is satisfying for a reader and which might teach a lesson. All the way through the story, use descriptive language to help describe the places and characters well. Because we are also learning about myths and legends, some of us decided to use the myth genre. Myths are imaginary narratives which use a story with a message to try to explain a natural phenomenon such as rain, wind or earthquakes.My story is a narrative but it's also a myth. My story is a myth because it is an imaginative way of trying to explain why we have tides and tar.

Water Dragon

A myth by Tylah Ratahi.

Once upon a time there was a dragon. His home was the mountains and

is bed was a soft mountain side.His weight made the mountain split in half and form a sea where he drank water daily.

He was a tall, hairy dragon with smelly feet who always had a big smile which made wrinkles on his chubby cheeks. His nose was as big as a mountain and he was known as the Water Dragon because could bring the tide in and out. He used to drink the water and spit it back out because it was salty, and that also made waves.

On a sunny Friday, Water Dragon went to go get a drink.He noticed the water tasted different, grossly different. He had swallowed polluted water and he had already taken a humongous gulp.He spat it all out. I can never drink water again he thought. But the people said, “ if there are no more  tides  the fish will die!”

The people scream at Water Dragon,“Drink up, make the tides keep working!”

Just then along came a fire dragon and said, “What’s the problem?”

“ I can't drink the polluted water and make the tides anymore,” said Water Dragon.

“Well, I can take care of that,” said Fire Dragon. He gulped up all the polluted water and then did an enormous poop. He pooped out a humongous pile of sticky black tar and then he spewed back all the water sparkling clean again.

He became the town hero and so did Water Dragon because he could carry on making the tides again. They became a team and were best friends forever.

And that is why seas have tides and why we have tar on Earth.

Christmas

This is my writing about my Christmas.

Panda

Kia ora

This is an activity we did when we were learning how to find facts and put them in the right box on  a fishbone diagram. We are learning how to write a report about an animal which is native to China. We are learning about China at the moment because last week was Chinese language week and one of our classmates, Braeden, is half Chinese.

Something I think I have done well  is making sure I got the right facts in the right box.

Next time I think I could improve by writing more notes and fewer sentences. I need to just write down key words not whole sentences when I am making notes.

Ka kite ano

Descriptive Writing _ Animal: Karakiri.

Hi,
This week I did even more descriptive writing and this time it was about an animal. My animal is called a Karakiri. This is the Maori word for a parakeet.Though, that is what I thought.
A Karakiri is a green bird that lives in a forest.
It is a very unique bird and they make good pets.
We had to a do a picture brainstorm with describing words around it and complete a paragraph plan.

Descriptive Writing.

Hi this week I have been doing descriptive writing with Miss Dixon, we had to write about a setting and a character using descriptive language to describe the character/setting in a appropriate way.I enjoyed describing the witch.

Perception of Words_TYLAH.

Hi this is my perception of words presentation I did with Mrs D my one has not been made into a story for my buddy did not write nicely.

Poetry- Pollution.

Kia Ora

Here is my free verse bit of poetry I wrote myself about pollution,
hopefully you will listen to my poem and understand why you don't pollute .

(p.s click to view large size.)

SUGAR!!!!

Hi,
this is my best slide for my presentation : Sugar.
I like this one because I really like the spy and because everything suits.
=P
   Kia ora,
       Tylah.

Descriptive Writing

Hi
This week we have been doing descriptive writing with Miss Dixon. We had to write about a castle and a character. I chose a witch. I liked describing the witch the most. We were learning to use similes and describe a setting and a character with appropriate language.

Writing W5T1 2016

Here is my published recount about our walk up Te Ahuahu mountain. I edited it myslef. I want you to notice that I used a simile.

Handwriting. W5T1 2016

My first handwriting sample for the year.
Here is a screenshot of my handwriting sample.I need to work on the letter k and my height of my
letters.

Writing Wk3.

We also have continued
with our weekend writing,this is my finished one.
My buddy did not do a lot so I have produced this recount by person.

TERM 1 Unassisted Recount.Week 2

Here is my unassisted recount that I did this week. We didn’t get any help from the teacher. We have made copies so that our friends can help  us improve them.